It Started with a Kiss 2020

Form: Ae Freslighe and Awdl Gywydd

Senses denied expectation
Restrictions in love confess
On flesh my own fixation
Is you, should I dare possess
In the sweet dampness, a kiss
Erotic bliss on your skin
For my lips demand and claim
The flame you’ve hidden within
I see you want passionate
Desire in this love making
My want is to ration it
Until you’re mine for taking
My lips linger on your heat
Missing the beat of your lust
Tormenting senses with tease
Whisper please, beg if you must
No, darling, my refusal
Will only feed your desire
My intent is arousal
As thoughts burn in the fire
And I know your nipple burns
As it turns over my tongue
The craving want of my love
I spoke of, now you’ve been stung
My fingers sense reactions
Gentle touches too intense
I see muscle contractions
And still you wait in suspense
As I hold you at the edge
For my pledge to take you there
To that place your mind lets go
And love flows without a care
I demand that surrender
Again, I demand it, tonight
Your master and defender
Always in love my delight
As you cry I kiss your tears
There’s no fear in love’s deeds
I will take you with my lust
Each thrust sating both our needs

©JGFarmer2020

Poet’s Note: A rewrite of my 2008 poem was suggested by an Irishman to a Welshman – so combining Irish and Welsh forms here – let the fun begin.

The original 2008 poem: https://jezfarmerblog.wordpress.com/2020/05/19/it-started-with-a-kiss/

As a poet, I am rather fond of both the Ae Freslighe and the Awdl Gywydd, in my humble opinion like all Celtic verse forms much neglected, however, writing them together has been a challenge. Me, and my bright ideas, eh?

4 thoughts on “It Started with a Kiss 2020

  1. It’s going to be absolutely fascinating to see who is brave enough to pop on to comment on this! Brilliant, but definitely not holding back here, not a solitary inch, and it reminded me of when I first read Anaïs Nin, which definitely wasn’t the kind of literature you felt comfortable reading in front of your mother, but not because of its obviousness, but it’s subtlety and power of suggestion. I wish I could comment on the form, but I don’t know enough about it, a situation which I’m now going to have to rectify. As Jeeves might say “Well done sir, you have risen to the challenge!” though I sense yet again my Donegal picture has muddied the waters some. I had someone in New Zealand assume I was Irish, and I still haven’t got around to correcting her. I’m about as Welsh as you can get, born in Barry and gradually working my way back there, apart from sadly not having the lovely Welsh lilt. The Culdaff beach photo is because it’s a very special place; I got married there (it was snowing) my son in law proposed to my daughter there (it was raining) and every time we go back, if it’s not snowing or raining, it’s bloody freezing. But there is a saying, you never go to Ireland for the weather ! Well done again!

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    1. Wow, what a comment, thank you

      Not quite Anais Nin, more Leopold von Sacher-Masoch and Venus in Furs as I read that shortly before I wrote the original in 2008, though I do love Anais Nin too. Sacher-Masoch didn’t hold back, and indeed not one to leave lying around on the coffee table.

      Whether Irish or Welsh I hope you do explore the Celtic verse forms as they get forgotten. I won’t lie, they are not easy, they make you explore words.

      Forgive the mistake, I originate from Snowdonia and call Caidair Idris my spiritual home. I believe Ireland and Wales have the same issue with weather – you get it all in 24 hours too. My Nan used to just tell us to put a coat on and get out there, didn’t have an Xbox back then.

      Thanks for the challenge

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      1. I’m definitely going to explore those forms, (and Mr Leopold!) I think it’s healthy to move out of your comfort zone. Even if what comes out isn’t exactly what you’re happy with, you learn from the process and if helps develop your style…

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